tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3553440626649035970.post731173863942003302..comments2023-12-10T16:30:24.965+00:00Comments on Max Atkinson's Blog: Relaunching the coalition and the cost of Etonian English?Max Atkinsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06163447049027217653noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3553440626649035970.post-17737068923012281392012-05-15T18:09:07.528+01:002012-05-15T18:09:07.528+01:00sorry, that should be to "win us over". ...sorry, that should be to "win us over". <br />Should be: "that isn't very good writing, most kids would be killed..." I also put a "that" where there was no need for one.<br />My thoughts were moving faster than my hands and grammar was obviously proving to be too difficult.nichttp://priggy.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3553440626649035970.post-57358903600839842362012-05-15T17:12:14.344+01:002012-05-15T17:12:14.344+01:00The paragraphs aren't completely verbless para...The paragraphs aren't completely verbless paragraphs, in the first paragraph the word "is" is a verb and in the second, the abbreviated "am" & "fought" are verbs. <br />All the others aren't sentences, most don't have subjects either. <br />The subject and verb in most of the two paragraphs are implied though. "We are seeing ... We are cutting... We are helping..." that isn't very good writing most kids would be killed for starting sentences with "We are" all the time. Teachers in my school hated repetition as apparently it showed a) didn't know many words b) couldn't structure what you wanted to say into sentences that weren't repetitive.<br />Forgive me if I'm wrong, but it reads like that the PM writes in a similar manner to the way he speaks. He's writing as if he were given a speech. <br />Would the PMs writing and speeches get better if in his speeches and in his writing where he is trying to in us over, implied verbs and subjects are off limits.Nichttp://priggy.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com